Notice how the writer of this paragraph starts each sentence and clause with a personal pronoun.
While the writer does alternate between “I” and “my”, both pronouns refer to the same subject.
refers to the physical nature of a sentence and how the elements of that sentence are presented.
Just like word choice, writers should strive to vary their sentence structure to create rhythmic prose and keep their reader interested.
While each clause does provide relevant information, the reader may have difficulty identifying the subject and purpose of the whole paragraph.
In 2010, the company’s yearly profit growth decreased from the previous year by 2%. The profit growth had steadily increased by more than 7% since 1989.
(They stabilized in 2009.) This announcement stunned Wall Street analysts.
However, it aligns with the decrease in similar company profit growth worldwide.
This repetition of personal pronouns is most common when writing a Personal Development Plan (PDP) or other personal papers.
To avoid this type of repetition, try adjusting the placement of prepositional phrases or dependent clauses so the subject does not open each sentence: My philosophy of education is derived from my personal experiences.