When you borrow a figure from another source, you should say something like, "Figure reproduced from " or "Figure reproduced from reference 8" in the figure caption. The transfer of mass between two gravitational wells ." leaves the reader wondering if the actual figure comes from reference 8, or whether reference 8 simply discusses the topic or contains a similar figure which inspired this one.
It is not enough to just put in a reference without explicitly stating that the figure comes from that reference. In the first paragraph of the fourth page the focus and flow is diminished a bit.
Mass at the outer edge of the larger body is captured by stronger gravitational pull of the smaller but denser body."It is best to refer to a figure using it's label rather than it's position on the page.
For example, rather than saying "in the figure below" or, as is done here, "The following diagram illustrates...", it would be better to say "in figure 1" or "Figure 1 illustrates..."Give credit where credit is due.
Most of you have probably written less than a handful of term papers.
Writing clearly and concisely is more difficult than you may think.
These are some of the better papers that have been handed in in past semesters.
Note, however, that these papers are far from perfect.
There needs to be a better transition from the discussion of gravity wave generation to the discussion of detection. When an expert can say something much better than you can, it's okay to quote them. One of the hardest things you'll have to do as you write papers is to leave out really cool things.
Don't ever just stop talking about one thing and start on another. Why write a phrase in your own words when someone else has already stated it perfectly! However, students often put quotes into their papers not because the quote fits into the discussion, but because they think it is clever or because they think it would be neat to have words by someone cool like Einstein in their paper. After searching for days for that one special quote that you remember hearing, it's tough not to put it into the paper. I love how they discuss Weber bars by first giving a general description, then going into details, and then describing in chronological order how different improvements were made. The quote starting "ALLEGRO has had unprecedented immunity..." seems to me like an example of a good quote which they should have had the guts to throw out.